Blog 12

I think that in this scene in my script, there are many strengths. Because it is so early on in the script, the characters are still sort of being introduced. I liked how me and Gannon introduced Snax, the chubby kid that joins our survival crew. We put him in the back of an ice cream truck. Luther and Titus, looking for another vehicle to travel with, stumble upon Snax while he's eating ice cream in the back of the truck. I also like how we made Snax such a jolly character.

A weakness of the scene could be that it is a bit rushed. At the time, I wasn't sure if we still needed 100 pages, and we only had a few weeks left. I sort of crunched the time that Snax was met, the supplies were gathered, and the crew headed out to Topeka. I think that if I had more time to write, I could have expanded on the details of the scene.

Like I said, I would improve the script by adding more detail to the activities the charcters do. I would have planned out how Starr and Luther wanted to kill Titus and Celtix, made more characters to join the overall survival group, and added a few more twists then I originally had. Overall, if more time was accessible, me and Gannon could have made this a billion dollar script.