When we first started discussing the Script Frenzy, I was pissed, not going to lie. If anything, I just would have rather written a 100 page story, with little dialogue. But, when we could pick partners, at least I had Gannon to help me write it.
We picked a zombie survival film, and now that it’s done, the script wasn’t actually too bad. If we had more time, I think it could have been real awesome. Honestly, none of the packet helped me. I only did it because you assigned it, otherwise I would have just written the script as it was. The way I write, I never use planning or anything like that. I’m a very impulsive person, so that reflects on my writing. Being by far the longest paper I ever have had to write, it for sure taught me something about myself. It taught me that even though I didn’t get to 100 pages, that getting to 30 was a pretty difficult task.
It takes effort to complete, unlike 90% of the writing assignments I have completed throughout my high school career. Writing luckily comes easy to me, so I never really had to try on 2 page essays in English class, but I did like how this assignment challenged anything I’ve ever attempted before.
My script got to about 32 pages, but I still think I managed my time well. Because I went to Poland for 10 days, I missed a lot of class time. Of course, there were times in class where I didn’t get my work done, but I made up for it by focusing and getting up to 5 pages a day done. The strength of my script would most likely be the realism I put into it.
The main characters are teenagers, so they do things other teens would do, like swear, drugs, etc. even in the zombie apocalypse that is destroying their world. A weakness would be the lack of detail at certain points, where I felt rushed to complete the script. Some of the scenes are visibly rushed. But other than that, I don’t really see a weakness, not to sound cocky or anything.
If I had more time on this script, I would finish it. It would have more detail, and more importantly, this movie would become famous. I and Gannon could have made billions on this thing, it’s that good. Ha-ha I’m just kidding, but I did have a lot of fun writing this thing.
Inside the brain of Zach
Friday, June 8, 2012
Blog 12
I think that in this scene in my script, there are many strengths. Because it is so early on in the script, the characters are still sort of being introduced. I liked how me and Gannon introduced Snax, the chubby kid that joins our survival crew. We put him in the back of an ice cream truck. Luther and Titus, looking for another vehicle to travel with, stumble upon Snax while he's eating ice cream in the back of the truck. I also like how we made Snax such a jolly character.
A weakness of the scene could be that it is a bit rushed. At the time, I wasn't sure if we still needed 100 pages, and we only had a few weeks left. I sort of crunched the time that Snax was met, the supplies were gathered, and the crew headed out to Topeka. I think that if I had more time to write, I could have expanded on the details of the scene.
Like I said, I would improve the script by adding more detail to the activities the charcters do. I would have planned out how Starr and Luther wanted to kill Titus and Celtix, made more characters to join the overall survival group, and added a few more twists then I originally had. Overall, if more time was accessible, me and Gannon could have made this a billion dollar script.
A weakness of the scene could be that it is a bit rushed. At the time, I wasn't sure if we still needed 100 pages, and we only had a few weeks left. I sort of crunched the time that Snax was met, the supplies were gathered, and the crew headed out to Topeka. I think that if I had more time to write, I could have expanded on the details of the scene.
Like I said, I would improve the script by adding more detail to the activities the charcters do. I would have planned out how Starr and Luther wanted to kill Titus and Celtix, made more characters to join the overall survival group, and added a few more twists then I originally had. Overall, if more time was accessible, me and Gannon could have made this a billion dollar script.
Thursday, April 26, 2012
Blog #11, hope I go to heaven
Titus and Celtix stand alone in the garage, setting up plans to leave for Topeka. Celtix cracks open a black cherry soda and hands another to Titus, one of their favorite drinks while growing up. The garage is open, and leaves rustle by; the only sound left to hear in this eerie forsaken world.
Titus: "We need to make a decision, I understand you feel the need for us to stick together.. but I don't trust Luther. He's already made risky decisions that have put all of us in jeapordy"
Celtix: "Believe me, I know.. but as of right now, we've only got eachother. No one else knows where they're going or what to do. We have an idea.. whether its a good plan or not. We're pretty much in charge.
Titus: "..Ok, hows this, Snax will drive sweet tooth with sloan and Old Man Witherspoon, while we stick together in the hummer with Starr and L. Sound good?
Celtix: "Aren't you forgetting someone?!"
Titus: "Personally, I feel no need to bring Luther, he's done nothing but cause problems and raise tention in the group.. He's not needed"
Celtix: "Tention in the group? or between you and Starr?.. I get it, you dont trust him. But that doesnt mean we leave him for dead.. we'll put him in charge of Old Man Witherspoon when were not traveling, that should keep him busy and away from Starr..
Titus: "Agreed, Now lets get moving. We dont have time to waste and the longer we take to decide the longer they have to prepare..."
Titus: "We need to make a decision, I understand you feel the need for us to stick together.. but I don't trust Luther. He's already made risky decisions that have put all of us in jeapordy"
Celtix: "Believe me, I know.. but as of right now, we've only got eachother. No one else knows where they're going or what to do. We have an idea.. whether its a good plan or not. We're pretty much in charge.
Titus: "..Ok, hows this, Snax will drive sweet tooth with sloan and Old Man Witherspoon, while we stick together in the hummer with Starr and L. Sound good?
Celtix: "Aren't you forgetting someone?!"
Titus: "Personally, I feel no need to bring Luther, he's done nothing but cause problems and raise tention in the group.. He's not needed"
Celtix: "Tention in the group? or between you and Starr?.. I get it, you dont trust him. But that doesnt mean we leave him for dead.. we'll put him in charge of Old Man Witherspoon when were not traveling, that should keep him busy and away from Starr..
Titus: "Agreed, Now lets get moving. We dont have time to waste and the longer we take to decide the longer they have to prepare..."
Blog #10, only once never again
This describes our characters moving forward to their final destination, Organizing and planning so it can eventually fall to shit and they can be royally screwed sometime in the not so distant future.
Titus: "We need to make a decision, I understand you feel the need for us to stick together.. but I don't trust Luther. He's already made risky decisions that have put all of us in jeapordy"
Celtix: "Believe me, I know.. but as of right now, we've only got eachother. No one else knows where they're going or what to do. We have an idea.. whether its a good plan or not. We're pretty much in charge.
Titus: "..Ok, hows this, Snax will drive sweet tooth with sloan and Old Man Witherspoon, while we stick together in the hummer with Starr and L. Sound good?
Celtix: "Aren't you forgetting someone?!"
Titus: "Personally, I feel no need to bring Luther, he's done nothing but cause problems and raise tention in the group.. He's not needed"
Celtix: "Tention in the group? or between you and Starr?.. I get it, you dont trust him. But that doesnt mean we leave him for dead.. we'll put him in charge of Old Man Witherspoon when were not traveling, that should keep him busy and away from Starr..
Titus: "Agreed, Now lets get moving. We dont have time to waste and the longer we take to decide the longer they have to prepare..."
Titus: "We need to make a decision, I understand you feel the need for us to stick together.. but I don't trust Luther. He's already made risky decisions that have put all of us in jeapordy"
Celtix: "Believe me, I know.. but as of right now, we've only got eachother. No one else knows where they're going or what to do. We have an idea.. whether its a good plan or not. We're pretty much in charge.
Titus: "..Ok, hows this, Snax will drive sweet tooth with sloan and Old Man Witherspoon, while we stick together in the hummer with Starr and L. Sound good?
Celtix: "Aren't you forgetting someone?!"
Titus: "Personally, I feel no need to bring Luther, he's done nothing but cause problems and raise tention in the group.. He's not needed"
Celtix: "Tention in the group? or between you and Starr?.. I get it, you dont trust him. But that doesnt mean we leave him for dead.. we'll put him in charge of Old Man Witherspoon when were not traveling, that should keep him busy and away from Starr..
Titus: "Agreed, Now lets get moving. We dont have time to waste and the longer we take to decide the longer they have to prepare..."
Wednesday, April 25, 2012
Blog #9, and now I'm feelin fine
The relationship I'm describing here is between Titus and Luther, who end up fighting over fellow survivor Starr...
Titus: "I think it's time we head out, we've been camped here for 3 days. Can't stay in one place to long, especially if we want to reach Ohio tomorrow."
Luther: "Who put you in charge big shot? If anyone should be the leader it's me! I'm our QB, I've lead our team to more victories then any other in our schools history. What have you done Titus? Nothing! Step aside, bitch."
Titus: "Nobody gives a shit about your pathedic highschool accomplishments. You think this is a joke? Everybody's fucking dead Luther. My parents, your parents, everyone. Our only hope is making it to Topeka and your worried you won't be the one in charge? Jesus think about someone other then yourself for once. The last thing we need is some gorilla leading the way"
Luther: "Who the fuck you calling a gorilla?!"
Starr: "Guys, guys! Calm down, lets take a deep breath for a minute."
Titus: "I think it's time we head out, we've been camped here for 3 days. Can't stay in one place to long, especially if we want to reach Ohio tomorrow."
Luther: "Who put you in charge big shot? If anyone should be the leader it's me! I'm our QB, I've lead our team to more victories then any other in our schools history. What have you done Titus? Nothing! Step aside, bitch."
Titus: "Nobody gives a shit about your pathedic highschool accomplishments. You think this is a joke? Everybody's fucking dead Luther. My parents, your parents, everyone. Our only hope is making it to Topeka and your worried you won't be the one in charge? Jesus think about someone other then yourself for once. The last thing we need is some gorilla leading the way"
Luther: "Who the fuck you calling a gorilla?!"
Starr: "Guys, guys! Calm down, lets take a deep breath for a minute."
Friday, April 20, 2012
Blog #8, death is not my fate
Dialogue Takeaways
1) Dialogue needs to express feelings of characters without actually saying how they feel. If a character is angry it should be expressed through his words, without saying his is upset.
2) The original dialogue you write should be edited and changed until it matches exactly what you are trying to get across to your reader
3) Not only the hero in the story, but the villain should also have personalized dialogue. Regardless of being the "bad guy", they still have the same feelings and emotions as every other character you write about.
1) Dialogue needs to express feelings of characters without actually saying how they feel. If a character is angry it should be expressed through his words, without saying his is upset.
2) The original dialogue you write should be edited and changed until it matches exactly what you are trying to get across to your reader
3) Not only the hero in the story, but the villain should also have personalized dialogue. Regardless of being the "bad guy", they still have the same feelings and emotions as every other character you write about.
Wednesday, April 18, 2012
Blog #7, not quite 11
Opening Scene: Erie music plays and shows scenes around town. The town is barren and abandonded. Cars are skewed off road with nobody in them, the local Wegmans and Target parking lots are empty and quiet, and no signs of life seem to exist anywhere. After about 3 minutes of showing these pictures, the screen goes black before showing Titus waking up in his room around 8am, apparently waking up from a nightmare.
The Big Decision: Titus and Celtix both decide that heading to Topeka is their best chance at finding out what has happened. Joining up with Luther, Starr, Langsenkamp, Sloan, Snax, and Old Man Witherspoon. The team of surviviors take an abandoned baby blue hummer, and an icecream truck stocked with food, water, and LOTS of guns on their trip to Topeka. They drive until they run out of gas.
The Final Push: The group is tired, weary, and distraught after losing some members and taking the long journey to Topeka. But hopes remain high as they are close to reaching their destination. Titus even finds love in Starr. When they finally reach the city outskirts, their dreams are crushed as they see the city is overrun with the same zombies back home. As the camera zooms out of the survivors in shock, a quarter of 1 million zombies climb the fence around the city limits headed straight towards the only known survivors.
The Big Decision: Titus and Celtix both decide that heading to Topeka is their best chance at finding out what has happened. Joining up with Luther, Starr, Langsenkamp, Sloan, Snax, and Old Man Witherspoon. The team of surviviors take an abandoned baby blue hummer, and an icecream truck stocked with food, water, and LOTS of guns on their trip to Topeka. They drive until they run out of gas.
The Final Push: The group is tired, weary, and distraught after losing some members and taking the long journey to Topeka. But hopes remain high as they are close to reaching their destination. Titus even finds love in Starr. When they finally reach the city outskirts, their dreams are crushed as they see the city is overrun with the same zombies back home. As the camera zooms out of the survivors in shock, a quarter of 1 million zombies climb the fence around the city limits headed straight towards the only known survivors.
Wednesday, April 4, 2012
Blog #6, Tom Brady throws picks
This is my Script Frenzy plot, so don't hate if it's weak.
SET-UP: Titus and Celtix awake in their suburban neighborhood in upstate New York to find nobody but themselves and a few others alone. Nobody seems to remain except a few "undead" prowling the streets. Cell phones aren't working, power is down, and the water taps are shot.
INCITING INCIDENT: Titus and Celtix each find a note written on their fridge doors saying Topeka, Kansas. They both decide it's their only hope of discovering what has happened, so they and the other survivors find a map, grab a neighbors abandoned Hummer, and head to Kansas.
RISING ACTION: On their way to Topeka, they pass through 5 other states, and travel a total of 1763.78 miles. Along the way, they mend and bend relationships formed with Luther, their schools starting QB, Starr, his beautiful yet intelligent girlfriend, and Langsenkamp, a school nerd that never talks, but has keen survival skills. They also meet a few more surviviors that follow them on their journey. The group becomes so large that they must ration the food supplies and pick a leader. Titus and Luther both are selected as candidates, and they fight to become head hancho.
CLIMAX: Titus and Luther eventually clash as opposites to where they fight and cause a scene that attracts undead to the groups rest area. Everyone is caught off guard and have no chance of holding off the attack. Some escape, separated from the group itself, and some succumb to the undead attackers.
FALLING ACTION: Titus and Starr are separated from the group, while they have no idea where the others could be. They start off as enemies, but quickly become closer as they aren't sure if they will see the others, if any human life, again. Meanwhile, The rest of the group try and think of a way to contact the missing members. Eventually, they meet at the same town by chance and fight off an attack of zombies together.
RESOLUTION: Finally reaching their destination, the rest of the stragglers are excited to enter the city and see what waits for them. All seems good, no more conflicts remain among the group, and hopes are high. But as they reach the city limits, they can see from afar that Topeka is plauged by them same problems their home town, and every other place they have passed, has developed. Zombies now control the United States, and possibly the world. The remaining survivors are left alone, dreams crushed, with 250000 + undead leaving Topeka, heading right towards them.
SET-UP: Titus and Celtix awake in their suburban neighborhood in upstate New York to find nobody but themselves and a few others alone. Nobody seems to remain except a few "undead" prowling the streets. Cell phones aren't working, power is down, and the water taps are shot.
INCITING INCIDENT: Titus and Celtix each find a note written on their fridge doors saying Topeka, Kansas. They both decide it's their only hope of discovering what has happened, so they and the other survivors find a map, grab a neighbors abandoned Hummer, and head to Kansas.
RISING ACTION: On their way to Topeka, they pass through 5 other states, and travel a total of 1763.78 miles. Along the way, they mend and bend relationships formed with Luther, their schools starting QB, Starr, his beautiful yet intelligent girlfriend, and Langsenkamp, a school nerd that never talks, but has keen survival skills. They also meet a few more surviviors that follow them on their journey. The group becomes so large that they must ration the food supplies and pick a leader. Titus and Luther both are selected as candidates, and they fight to become head hancho.
CLIMAX: Titus and Luther eventually clash as opposites to where they fight and cause a scene that attracts undead to the groups rest area. Everyone is caught off guard and have no chance of holding off the attack. Some escape, separated from the group itself, and some succumb to the undead attackers.
FALLING ACTION: Titus and Starr are separated from the group, while they have no idea where the others could be. They start off as enemies, but quickly become closer as they aren't sure if they will see the others, if any human life, again. Meanwhile, The rest of the group try and think of a way to contact the missing members. Eventually, they meet at the same town by chance and fight off an attack of zombies together.
RESOLUTION: Finally reaching their destination, the rest of the stragglers are excited to enter the city and see what waits for them. All seems good, no more conflicts remain among the group, and hopes are high. But as they reach the city limits, they can see from afar that Topeka is plauged by them same problems their home town, and every other place they have passed, has developed. Zombies now control the United States, and possibly the world. The remaining survivors are left alone, dreams crushed, with 250000 + undead leaving Topeka, heading right towards them.
Monday, April 2, 2012
Logline Revision
Here's the real logline
Logline: Two teens awake in their suburban neighborhood to find no sign of life, undead prowling outdoors, and a note on each of their fridges saying Topeka, Kansas.
Logline: Two teens awake in their suburban neighborhood to find no sign of life, undead prowling outdoors, and a note on each of their fridges saying Topeka, Kansas.
Friday, March 30, 2012
Logline
Logline: Two teens awake in their suburban neighborhood to find no sign of life, undead prowling outdoors, and a note on each of their fridges saying Topeka, Kansas.
Tuesday, February 28, 2012
Other People's 6 Word Memoirs
1. "It's an open sunroof kinda day."
2. "Hello David Karp, who are you?"
3. "Destination: anywhere the drinks flow strong."
4. "Some things will never ever change"
5. "What if today was my day?"
These Memoirs all caught my eye while I was looking, for different reasons. The first i related to, because somedays I just like to chill out in the summer and drive around with the sunroof opening, enjoying the warm air. The second one was cool because it was the guys name, and asking who you were, like who you wanted to be in life. The third I liked because the guy clearly likes to party, and that's what I'm about. The fourth I related to, because I know many people in this world that no matter what you do, they will never change. Finally, the fifth memoir was the most powerful to me. It said "What if today was my day?". I honestly believe that everday is a new one, and could change your life. What if it IS my day?
These memoirs gave me a good feel for what mine will be.
Wednesday, February 15, 2012
Goals for Growth, Son
Personally I believe I'm a pretty swell writer as it is, but nobody is perfect. So, a couple of things I would like to work on would be my Variety and Volume.
The Volume (or length) of my pieces are generally not as long as they could be. When I write, my only goal is to get the main point across, sometimes putting in little or no effort to go in depth. Don't get me wrong, I do like to go in depth when I'm really excited about what I'm writing, when the topic is interesting or cool. If I could somehow always have that outlook on my work, for instance, a final paper, maybe the volume of pieces would be much denser....get it? Haaaha yeah.
Another area I could always tinker with and improve is the variety. Actually, I think all writers could improve on this skill, because you can never have too many different things to write. My topics normally include random rants where I just type to see words on the paper, and it probably doesn't look so hot to readers (I just did it right there), but I digress. My risk taking is at a pretty decent level, but I think using prompts and other things of that nature will help give me variety in my writing.
That's about all I got. My Maintenance, or organization, is top of the line. I go deep into my head all the time to pick out what I want to say, so my Thoughtfulness is on track. I guess all I need to do is hope for the best, work on some shit, and make myself into the next big thing, for writers that is.
-Gage
The Volume (or length) of my pieces are generally not as long as they could be. When I write, my only goal is to get the main point across, sometimes putting in little or no effort to go in depth. Don't get me wrong, I do like to go in depth when I'm really excited about what I'm writing, when the topic is interesting or cool. If I could somehow always have that outlook on my work, for instance, a final paper, maybe the volume of pieces would be much denser....get it? Haaaha yeah.
Another area I could always tinker with and improve is the variety. Actually, I think all writers could improve on this skill, because you can never have too many different things to write. My topics normally include random rants where I just type to see words on the paper, and it probably doesn't look so hot to readers (I just did it right there), but I digress. My risk taking is at a pretty decent level, but I think using prompts and other things of that nature will help give me variety in my writing.
That's about all I got. My Maintenance, or organization, is top of the line. I go deep into my head all the time to pick out what I want to say, so my Thoughtfulness is on track. I guess all I need to do is hope for the best, work on some shit, and make myself into the next big thing, for writers that is.
-Gage
Monday, February 13, 2012
Welcome to My Mind
Whatsup? I'm Zach, and this is my blog.
I'm not going to sugar-coat any of this, I love to write, but not poems or things like that. I am a rapper.
Some of my biggest influences are game-changing artists, some that you probably have never heard of. Chilish Gambino is probably my biggest role model. Look him up, he's pretty dope.
But back to the topic, why did I start to write lyrics? A couple years ago, when there was no "Twitter" and EVERYBODY, and I mean everybody, was on Facebook, kids from my highschool tried out a rapping fad.
Now keep in mind, I am from a middle-class suburban town in NY, with 90% of my school being white. Not that there's anything against that, it's just very unusal to see a sucessful white rapper, let alone a well-off-financial one.
So as I was saying, many kids were posting up videos of themselves, with midiocre bars and shitty sound quality, getting a "Like" or 2 here or there. That's when I thought....why not give it a try? If it sucks when I play it back, then I don't have to post it and embaress myself. Lets go for it.
It took me only about 10 minutes to write, 20 minutes to record, and 5 to post to Facebook.
The song was great, and I knew it. Not to sound like a cocky son of a bitch, but it was decent. I got a ton of positive feedback, and it sparked me to continue.
Now I know I'm not going to be famous, so don't say it. I do it because it's fun as hell, and if you don't like it? You're at the wrong blog son. I got 99 problems and a bitch ain't one.
Peace, Engagedd
I'm not going to sugar-coat any of this, I love to write, but not poems or things like that. I am a rapper.
Some of my biggest influences are game-changing artists, some that you probably have never heard of. Chilish Gambino is probably my biggest role model. Look him up, he's pretty dope.
But back to the topic, why did I start to write lyrics? A couple years ago, when there was no "Twitter" and EVERYBODY, and I mean everybody, was on Facebook, kids from my highschool tried out a rapping fad.
Now keep in mind, I am from a middle-class suburban town in NY, with 90% of my school being white. Not that there's anything against that, it's just very unusal to see a sucessful white rapper, let alone a well-off-financial one.
So as I was saying, many kids were posting up videos of themselves, with midiocre bars and shitty sound quality, getting a "Like" or 2 here or there. That's when I thought....why not give it a try? If it sucks when I play it back, then I don't have to post it and embaress myself. Lets go for it.
It took me only about 10 minutes to write, 20 minutes to record, and 5 to post to Facebook.
The song was great, and I knew it. Not to sound like a cocky son of a bitch, but it was decent. I got a ton of positive feedback, and it sparked me to continue.
Now I know I'm not going to be famous, so don't say it. I do it because it's fun as hell, and if you don't like it? You're at the wrong blog son. I got 99 problems and a bitch ain't one.
Peace, Engagedd
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